RPing critique thread

[Iria Animi]

{{As both Iria's and Luke's RP-er}}

Geez fine! I'll reduce my '*' and change into '[]'! Damn.. Sorry, because i always use '*' in my past RPs other then ALA (yeah, i've RPed somewhere other then here). So, sorry.. I'll try! Rules are rules afterall..

And heck yeah! I still need so much to learn! I never write some thing like this before. And i only can draw in my life! Even tough it's not that good either. But I'll try my best then!

[Raven]

{{I didn't know you were Luke...XD}}

Duke Pantarei: got it. ima improve on my patty. [/only played ToV ps3 for ..3 minutes]

[Iria Animi]

Shishishii!!!

{{Yeah! Go two personality me! Way to go me! I've made everyone confused!! Well done me!!}}

[Jade Curtiss]

I do a good Jade....LOL

Ironically, half the time, I'm just me....

Now, for follow-up critiques:

Grammar: I tend to look past it, since English is not the first language of many people here, and its grammatical structure can be the reverse of what many are used to.

Posting Style: Yuri updated the Rules to include posting styles, so as long as people are consistent, we'll do fine.

Okay, keep in mind that I'm not familiar with some of these characters, so I'm going to guess at what they are. If I'm wrong, then you've portrayed the character wrong.

Iria: A hyper-active young lady with a severe crush on Asbel?

Asbel: You seem half reserved/half hyper, with a habit of picking on Hubert.

Hubert: Studious, quiet, and serious about fighting.

I haven't interacted with too many of the others, but let me know if I guessed right.

[Iria Animi]

WHAT?! YOU SAID THAT I HAVE A CRUSH ON ASBEL?!? THAT'S A NO WAY!!

[iria blushed hard and kinda shocked]

But it's true that i'm a hyper-active young lady tough! Shishishii!!

[grin evilly]

{{That's true tough!! Since there's no Ruca here yet.. and Asbel is so much fun to be yelled at tough! LOL!}}

[Jade Curtiss]

Well, it comes across as you having a crush on him.

[Iria Animi]

But i am not, sir!!

{{i mean, yes that's right sir! XP!!}}

[Hubert Ozwell]

Hubert's not so quiet... that after meeting Pascal...

[Sheena Wilder]

Be nice to me, guys.

I have to switch from Jade mode to Sheena mode......

[Luke Fon Fabre]

Weird you, Jade.. And weird me too.. Since Luke and Iria is a REALLY different person..

[Mao]

Feb 22, 2010 1:16:34 GMT 8 Duke Pantarei said:

Mao

[/i]= You captured his personality quite well, however, try to use caps on it's right place and more grammar use.[/quote]

.. captured his personality quite well ?
so, i did?

i'd love to share these thoughts while playing as Mao in Ad Libitum Academy, but.. i'm at loss of word.

to be honest ..... since i've been told about grammar use .. i was typing each sentences in microsoft word while hoping for it will be correct

*nod* true. i wasn't coming in to read and replying after joined in this academy and posting some messages. i haven't greet everyone, which makes me not able to get along with them and almost making Mao as a person who loves to run to any places, try to accomplish every assignment, and away from people.

*raise fist* YES!! i'll try to learn more about the character i'm playing as.
i'll try to dive to this academy, deeper, and deeper.

[Guy Cecil]

Me please!

[Anise Tatlin]

Me too! *raises hand*

[Flynn Scifo]

Flynn as well.

[Jade Curtiss]

Guy and Flynn--at first, you were too much like each other....(I wonder why.....LOL)

But, you're getting a handle on things.

Although, Guy WOULD have tried to save Rita, even though she is a girl, because her life was in danger.

Anise--you've captured the spirit of this girl wonderfully. But, remember, angsty Anise would try to hide her feelings at first.