RPing critique thread

[Senel Coolidge]

..So how was my RP so far?
..I know, my grammar sucks..
..But what else?

..Did i play Senel still a badass, or maybe he is to nice..?
..Well..Senel do care for his friend in the later story in Legendia, right?
..Or maybe he is a Cake God?

{{sorry about that, Duke.. XP!}}

[Zelos Wilder]

{{LOL Duke is gonna pwn you Senel}}

Forget about the grammar part... We tend to forget that, as long as you can use CAPS on the right place, it's enough.

By the way, how's my Zelos?

[Sheena Wilder]

I'm still waiting for a response for my Sheena.....

[Senel Coolidge]

..I see.. But hows my Senel?

..Like Iria have said, Zelos is a pretty boy.. I think he is cheerful as always, care for his friend too, and love Sheena so much, huh? Just don't make Sheena sad, that's all..

..For Sheena, i think you do good, but i think please do less speach and be more hyper, since you are Sheena any way, and not Jade.. And do more like a ninja please.. Lol.. You do love Zelos so much, huh..? ..Kinda like this pair too, but don't OVERdo it as a adult couple.. (because sheena's is.. Amazing one..)

..That's what i think, but i dunno about the others opinion.. So, what about Senel?

..Wish you two the best..

{{don't kill me, Duke XP!}}

[Sheena Wilder]

I thought Sheena was getting a little wordy. So, I started doing more actions.

Glad to know I was right.

As for your Senel....

Senel cared for people--although he was afraid to since he had been hurt before. His handing out of cakes to others shows his caring without being obvious.

But, I don't remember him being the one handing out nicknames....

[Senel Coolidge]

..Haha you're right.. Kinda ooc huh? Giving nicknames.. Maybe he still not close with that person.. Sorry about that..

..So.. Senel is care enough, huh? ..Okay.. Thanks for your opinion.

[Duke Pantarei]

Time for Duke's reviewing.

Sheena : I just read the one in the forest thread... That's Sheena, allright. Hole and her really comes in set.
Zelos : You're pretty good. You could picture him very good when he's serious.
Flynn : Let's see... You need to be more... Not angsty, maybe?
Senel : I think you're overdoing the cake thing. He is a pro at making cakes, but he only make it on his spare time, meaning not always... Try to lessen that and you're all set.

That's all from me.

~ Squirrel God

[Jade Curtiss]

Thank you, O mighty squirrel god....

[Shastelle Aiheap]

^I've read them all when I was lurking and true. Senel is too much at making cake and sometimes it's annoying because it's not at the right place. ( no offense) try to make it less, kay?

Flynn...humm..be more and more nicer, still felt cold aura from him....IMO. warmer, perhaps?

[Flynn Scifo]

Haha...Yeah, i know that. But this is what some of the people request just for the current plot.

However, i'll try to be moreeee nicer. Thank you, Squirrel God.

[Duke Pantarei]

...Erh, can't really comment on Shastelle since i haven't watched The First Strike.

By the way, isn't it supposed to be Chastel?

[Shastelle Aiheap]

Im not sure which one. im going to put the romaji. how is that?

[Jade Curtiss]

Currently, Flynn is in the middle of a "cold rage." He's mad as hell, but he's remaining calm. I believe he's pulling it off rather nicely.

[Shastelle Aiheap]

I see. forgive me then XD


(I forgot bout the plot )
wait so is it chastel?
if youre sure im gonna change it

[Duke Pantarei]

I can't really say anything myself... As i said, i haven't watched The First Strike, so i think it's up to you.

So, we're continuing this squirrel gag or just drop this? Because Duke's squirrel joke really made me ROFL